I thought it was amazing! there are a couple grammar mistakes, but other than that, its really good so far. I love your clan names, btw. I also really like your story line, but its a little confusing because a lot happens. otherwise its really great and i really hope you finish it, i would like to see the ending. :)
suggestion: press enter after a few lines when your making a long paragraph so it doesn't seem so long.
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